I've decided to re shoot my first draft in a differant style as there just wasnt enough tention. So today after lesson i am going to go and film another draft copy with my friend scott. I feel having a piece with no talking will come across more proefesional because I dont own any seperate microphones so voices always come out abit quite.
Storyline
Scott will start in my garage looking very confused and angry. we will see quick shots where he is punching things and looking around for something.
Shooting will start at 12.00 mid day on the 17th of march and will continue on until around 2 pm.
Editing was completed that night and here is my first attempt:
Thriller draft #1 from Nico Turner on Vimeo.
Feedback from first draft.
-Take care with titles - the last r of George Turner can't be seen on DVD
-There is a wobble on the first shot as it pans and titlts before reaching Scott.
-Is he supposed to run away from the arrows?
-What is the significance of the phone? Is he supposed to have dropped? There is no indication of this. - One of the criteria is that the editing should make meaning for the audience - this is not clear.
-Perhaps a little more indication of what is happening - imagine this is the begining of a film do we need more information.
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